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Persephone

A chill in the air,
each day like morning.
Sun shining high,
bird life is calling.
The day in light overcast,
clouds tinted grey.
Ice crisp grass,
a frost swept glade.

Fair lady,
beauty undying,
a Persephone,
the bringer of spring.
I'm between a warm glow,
and your brisk feelings.
They won't hinder my affections,
my unbridled sin.

You're a beauty,
free from blame,
you played it safe,
but still swept away.
Carried into evil,
into a dangerous place,
your grace ever marred,
your innocence stained.

Where has
that glowing gemstone gone?
The sparkle
behind your eyes now dull.
A diamond
that's transformed to coal.
My heart aches
because yours has turned to stone.

Fair lady,
beauty undying,
a Persephone,
the bringer of spring.
I'm between a warm glow,
and your brisk feelings.
They won't hinder my affections,
my unbridled sin.

Such a short time spent away,
yet all of you has ever changed,
a hardness pressed
into your once gentle face,
a firmness instilled
into your once sultry gait,
A brutality beaten
into your once endearing grace.

The lady lost...
The one never replaced.
Persephone


hey google chrome stop telling me to change Persephone to Personnel!
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ssensory Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Student Writer
I really enjoyed this! I like how it has Greek Mythology to it. :la:
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Nami-Kamalika Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013
thank you lovely xx
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ssensory Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Student Writer
You're welcome!
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Student Writer
That was beautiful. I love the imagery in this! :heart: A very nice poem with a tragic ending!
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Nami-Kamalika Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012
Aww thanks so much :D xxxx
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012  Student Writer
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BunnyFroofroo Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012
Very pretty, I like it :D Is it from Hades' point of view?
Also, there's no punctuation in this at all ;) I think if you added some it could add to the impact of the poem and how the reader is supposed to read it.
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Nami-Kamalika Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012
I know, I'm so lazy. Once i write a song i want to move on to the next one like right away, so they never get properly edited lol. I have a spare 5 minutes i might take a look at it now.

Its more like, being in love with someone who's experienced something that changes them into something not as pleasant as they used to be because of that hardship, and mourning what used to be, so that's where the Persephone comparison came from. If that isn't just gibberish.
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BunnyFroofroo Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012
I know exactly what you mean. I have to force myself to go over stuff I've written >.>

Oooh I see it :D
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Nami-Kamalika Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012
Which feels like a chore doesn't it? Despite the fact you were just working on it a few minutes ago! My attention span is terrible.

That's a relief :P
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